Comments for The Nightjar

Comment on the extended-stay america motel by J

Wed, 05 Mar 2008 07:35:36 +0000

Thanks, Martin! I’ve posted a slightly different (mostly at the end) version of this on Okir.

Comment on the extended-stay america motel by Martin

Martin — Tue, 04 Mar 2008 22:21:32 +0000

fantastico!

Comment on by ariana

ariana — Tue, 02 Oct 2007 10:14:22 +0000

http://www.voteforrory.com/forum/post.php?fid=3

Comment on Previous Post by J

Wed, 27 Jun 2007 02:28:49 +0000

Very interesting poem– on a lot of different levels!

I’ll have to think up a response to your response….
; )

Comment on Previous Post by onetarot

onetarot — Tue, 26 Jun 2007 20:27:59 +0000

Pinning the tale is painful;
the prick of the tack
is the least of it.

Who wants to be seen
spinning in place, stumbling
about, feeling the way?

If we told the party that,
sighted, we could push
the pin in just as deeply

would they agree?

Comment on Previous Post by Jean

Jean — Sat, 09 Jun 2007 03:55:33 +0000

It’s a little hard to explain. But I’ll give it a try. There’s usually, more or less, a kind of “tone” to my day, or parts of my day. I suppose you could call it a “mood” but I’m not sure that’s exactly it. It accompanies the events of the day and my myriad mental and emotional responses to those events. There are both patterned, habitual responses, and what I’d call more “free” and “aware” responses.

In terms of writing poetry, and “listening” in order to write, altogether tone and response creates sort of an ambient environment. I listen to it, and words emerge, or maybe just merge, ride in on that tone — like lyrics, I suppose, to the music of the day. Ideally, the words come out of awareness, rather than patterned, habitual responses.

Hope that’s not too confusing…

Comment on Previous Post by mannabozo

mannabozo — Thu, 07 Jun 2007 21:34:31 +0000

I’m a writer and I found what you said here interesting. Can you elaborate a bit on it?

Comment on by onetarot

onetarot — Thu, 05 Apr 2007 05:33:00 +0000

I love the phrase “woe is a spittle machine” , plus how it somehow rhymes with “between” later on (which only seems to work when it is read out loud).

I also like how you alternated, sometimes rapidly, between organic and inorganic elements.

Comment on by Jean Vengua

Jean Vengua — Thu, 01 Mar 2007 08:34:40 +0000

Thanks Michael. Funny, but WordPress says this was posted at 4:41 am. I typed it in before midnight. Talk about time slipping…

Comment on by onetarot

onetarot — Thu, 01 Mar 2007 07:47:35 +0000

This is marvelous. What a contrast between feelings and images: stark, yet sensual; disconsolate, yet serene. Thank you for sharing this.